OMPS! BY ROCKY RAMONES c/o 2019
The word "OMPS" was used since i was 1 years old from my dad. As i got older i got used to my dad gave me that word because he gives everyone in the family nicknames. No one in the family cause me OMPS except my daddy.
"OMPS" as my daddy always called me. "OMPS" is a Korean word that my dad gave me because my Aunty was watching a Korean drama show and she saw a little boy name Ompyon. My aunty yelled "Aye that looks like Rocky" so my daddy called me "OMPS". Every time at home he calls me "OMPS" when he needs me to do something. Also he spells it sometimes just for fun.
When I was still young he always used to say OMPS but i didn't know who he was calling so i just thought that was my name because he always just said it when he needs me to help him.
As I get older my dad usually calls me OMPS but if he doesn't he just calls me Rocky. But since he always used to call me OMPS i thought it was part of my name. But at every party my cousins or other relatives me me Rocky but my dad will sometimes says OMPS. Not even my mom, sisters, or brother calls me OMPS only my dad so that makes me special.
One day when my dad and I was going to the gym i ask him how did I get the word OMPS mean and he said "when you were young Aunty Cesa was watching a Korean Drama show and there was a little buy name Ompyon so she said that looks like me". So my dad gave me the OMPS for short of Ompyon. So since he calls me OMPS i feel special because he gives everyone a nickname that matches my name but my nickname doesn't match my name it was from a Korean Drama show that my Aunty watches.
When I was still young he always used to say OMPS but i didn't know who he was calling so i just thought that was my name because he always just said it when he needs me to help him.
As I get older my dad usually calls me OMPS but if he doesn't he just calls me Rocky. But since he always used to call me OMPS i thought it was part of my name. But at every party my cousins or other relatives me me Rocky but my dad will sometimes says OMPS. Not even my mom, sisters, or brother calls me OMPS only my dad so that makes me special.
One day when my dad and I was going to the gym i ask him how did I get the word OMPS mean and he said "when you were young Aunty Cesa was watching a Korean Drama show and there was a little buy name Ompyon so she said that looks like me". So my dad gave me the OMPS for short of Ompyon. So since he calls me OMPS i feel special because he gives everyone a nickname that matches my name but my nickname doesn't match my name it was from a Korean Drama show that my Aunty watches.
Dear Rocky, I think your essay is quite humorous. Throughout the essay, I laughed at certain parts such as, "My aunty yelled "Aye that looks like Rocky" so my daddy called me "OMPS." Not only was this part humorous it gave the audience on how you got the nickname more. However, there could be some fixes that will add more to the essay. For instance, there could be more details in your essay. At certain parts in the essay there were only ew sentences and not enough details. If you added details it will give the audience a more clearer image to read on. Also, in terms of conventions I think you should review this essay more to make sure that it makes more sense. Lastly, I think you should add on more why 'omps' is important to you. Otherwise, great job on your essay!
ReplyDeleteRocky. This story was really interesting to be completely honest and I really like it as well. On the first sentence, make the letter "i" uppercase and remove the "s" from "years". CAPITALIZE THE "I". This was actually humorous/funny and this sounds really honest and clear to the point I can actually hear you reading it. But yeah, this essay was really good. The topic is really good, and this story is thorough to the point that I can really understand it. GOOD JOB ~
ReplyDeleteAS(1) GREAT WORD SELECTION, AND GREAT STORY. YOU NEED TO DO A BETTER JOB OF EXPLAINING THINGS THOROUGHLY. YOU SAY IT'S SPECIAL TO YOU BUT DON'T EXPLAIN WHY. AND YOU SAID OMPS IS A KOREAN WORD, BUT IT ISN'T ITS YOUR DADS OWN WORD HE TOOK FROM THE ORIGINAL WORD. YOU ALSO REPEATED THE EXPLANATION OF WHERE THE NICKNAME CAME FROM, PLEASE FIX THAT. LASTLY, THERE IS NO PERSONAL REFLECTION. YOU NEED TO ADD PERSONAL REFLECTION, WHY IS THIS WORD SPECIAL TO YOU, COMPARED TO ALL THE OTHER WORDS WHY DOES THIS ONE STICK OUT. WHAT DO YOU FEEL OR THINK WHEN YOU HEAR THE WORD. THERE NEEDS TO BE MORE EMOTION AND PERSONAL REFLECTION.
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