I am a tall basketball who loves the game and his family.
I am a person who loves basketball so much I have offers to big
schools and even can even make it to the NBA.
I lead my team to victory and will always have a good time with my friends
I am a person when I was young my dad would push me to be the best
and play him 1 on 1 and every time he would beat me and I would
always get mad and throw the ball and get all mad. I am a big deal to
the school I go to and the school i am going to next.
Beyond all of that I am a person who will fight for my family and
protect my friends. I am friendly, lovable, and everyone cares about
Me. I am one one of the biggest people in basketball even the pros are
talking about me. I am named after a pro basketball player but who
mostly known for when he played street ball and got his nickname to
be so special.
Challenging my dad after a long time he taught the basketball is more
than a sport because it teaches you more about life. Basketball will
always teach me in life because it will help me how to control myself
like how i do on the court. I knew he always loved me and even though
he made a mistake I would choose the right thing that was for me and
for him.
Your poem was kind of unclear to me. I didn't know what your poem alluded to, and not much of it made any sense. You keep talking about how you and your dad would challenge each other but that could allude to anything. The first sentence says "I am a tall basketball who loves the game and his family," which I don't get. Are you the basketball? Give subtle hints about what you're talking about, but don't give it out to the point where they know what it is right off the bat. Don't confuse them either, so just try to improve your poem with relatable sentences about your allusion.
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